poem stuff

[supercheesegirl]

so i just wrote for, like, two hours. in my notebook. sometimes i'll work on revisions for hours at a time, but sitting at my computer; i hardly ever write for that long when i'm drafting. it was good. i wasn't thinking at first that i'd produce anything decent, but then i started thinking about saint augustine again. i had only written maybe two poems in monica's voice, but i remembered tonight that she was known for having prophetic dreams, reassuring her that augustine would be converted and etc even when it looked like he'd be a manichean a-hole forever. so i started writing her dreams. i think i wrote like four--starting with ones augustine described in the confessions (ie, "but my mother knew it would be so, Lord, because she had seen it in a dream you sent to comfort her..."), but getting into the details of it, and i also wrote a few that she supposedly didn't tell him about. i have really good feelings about these, but i don't know if they'll be any good--it's hard enough to write dreams when they're your own dreams, but making up dreams that your fictional character had is kind of odd. i mean, the dreams i made up for her might be totally conventional, or they might be obviously trying too hard, or might just be really lame. whatever; i'll leave them alone for a while and come back to them sometime next week maybe and see what they're up to.

but i'm a little worried because stuart's main ish with the poems we talked about yesterday was that they're not "wild" enough. i guess they have too much in the way of mundane detail and not enough poetic craziness. (these are poems about hiccups and the flu and eyebrows, btw, very everyday mundane things). i can see his point--i have plenty of details, but i'm not doing too much with metaphor and whatnot. but still, i felt kind of like he was saying my poems were boring. and i know they're not, at least not the eyebrows one (which stuart did really like too; he said the ending was worth the whole poem). and i think the hiccup one is pretty good too. maybe i just get grumpy when i have work to do. sighzorz.

and i would just like to say that a) because my home computer is really slow and b) because i don't have access to a fast computer anywhere other than at work where other people can hear, i have not yet seen the trogdor strongbad email. and i really, really want to. grr.

Comments

[pocketwitch.livejournal.com]

Where would a gal go if a gal wanted to read some of your poems?

[supercheesegirl.livejournal.com]

well, i guess the gal would have to come directly to me, as my poems aren't exactly out in the world at the moment. :) i can email you some things--are you interested in the augustiney stuff, or just in general?

[pocketwitch.livejournal.com]

Ah, it doesn't matter, just whatever you want to send along. I'd just like to read some of your stuff, I don't know that I've ever read any of your poetry, and that's just wrong.